my first rhyme

lyricale
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my diabolical content is a foreshadow to ur death. twice addictive than a crack head hoo[M:-247]

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my first rhyme May 23, 2005 22:44:10 GMT -5

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Post by lyricale on May 23, 2005 22:44:10 GMT -5

yoh its time for me to drop a verse
keep that forward motion, never in reverse
so i joined this shit for you to see my split personality
show you whos the baddest MC,i have you meet fatality
and no matter how deep or strong your flow is you can never take me down
i'm the illest up in town..turning ur smiles into frowns
you're all actors, face painted like clowns
and you expect me to give you props
it's like askin me to be nice to the cops
dre and nwa said it...fuck the police
it only takes a round for you to be down on ur knees
face disolved with bruises and scars
i'll leave you twitching like twinkling stars
this thread goes out for any fool that wants a piece of me
sure i'm new to this shit but you aint hard as E.

Last Edit: May 24, 2005 20:11:16 GMT -5 by lyricale

"life's a bitch, but God-forbid the bitch divorce me...i'll be flooded with ice so hellfire cant scorch me"

"i smell undercovers, i die with my brothers, and when im on the mic, i represent all colors"

record: 6-4

M.A.Y.day
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my first rhyme May 23, 2005 23:06:56 GMT -5

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Post by M.A.Y.day on May 23, 2005 23:06:56 GMT -5

That was way better than my 1st drop, i like how you had multiple words that rhymed in 1 line.........I would work on making a lot of your lines the same size/count syllables and say it out loud, make sure it flows nicely and i would vut down on

leave you seeing stars = super small lines
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and no matter how deep or strong your flow is you can never take me down
Long lines
Keep workin at it dawg, stay up

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Carmine Your Favorite Rapper's, Favorite Rapper REP My Record 11-0[M:-3642] Posts: 4,479	my first rhyme May 23, 2005 23:15:09 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Carmine on May 23, 2005 23:15:09 GMT -5 Wut up welcome to SP... From now on drop your verses and so on in OPEN MIC SESSION and check this link right HERE for some info on the site... Stay Active... What board ya from... ? ...
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SoulRebel Rookie Oprea 'o5 [0-3 aint done yet] Posts: 62	my first rhyme May 24, 2005 19:10:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by SoulRebel on May 24, 2005 19:10:39 GMT -5 aightman, good job, welcome
	Last Edit: May 24, 2005 19:11:00 GMT -5 by SoulRebel in this great future you cant forget ur past, so dry ur tears i say.

BP The Truth Money talks. Bullshit walks.[M:-568] Posts: 1,024	my first rhyme Jun 2, 2005 2:01:43 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by BP on Jun 2, 2005 2:01:43 GMT -5 nice intro
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lyricale
An Established MC

my diabolical content is a foreshadow to ur death. twice addictive than a crack head hoo[M:-247]

Posts: 493

my first rhyme Jun 4, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -5

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Post by lyricale on Jun 4, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -5

admin said:

Wut up welcome to SP... From now on drop your verses and so on in OPEN MIC SESSION and check this link right HERE for some info on the site... Stay Active...

What board ya from... ? ...

no other site...this is my first one.

"life's a bitch, but God-forbid the bitch divorce me...i'll be flooded with ice so hellfire cant scorch me"

"i smell undercovers, i die with my brothers, and when im on the mic, i represent all colors"

record: 6-4

nellygurl Reknown Rapper Posts: 545	my first rhyme Jun 6, 2005 12:11:46 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by nellygurl on Jun 6, 2005 12:11:46 GMT -5 hey welcum to the board have fun and stay active

lyricale An Established MC my diabolical content is a foreshadow to ur death. twice addictive than a crack head hoo[M:-247] Posts: 493	my first rhyme Jun 6, 2005 15:38:39 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by lyricale on Jun 6, 2005 15:38:39 GMT -5 nellygurl said: hey welcum to the board have fun and stay active thanx
	"life's a bitch, but God-forbid the bitch divorce me...i'll be flooded with ice so hellfire cant scorch me" "i smell undercovers, i die with my brothers, and when im on the mic, i represent all colors" record: 6-4

nellygurl Reknown Rapper Posts: 545	my first rhyme Jun 6, 2005 18:24:12 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by nellygurl on Jun 6, 2005 18:24:12 GMT -5 no prob.

Post by lyricale on May 23, 2005 22:44:10 GMT -5

Post by M.A.Y.day on May 23, 2005 23:06:56 GMT -5

Post by Carmine on May 23, 2005 23:15:09 GMT -5

Post by SoulRebel on May 24, 2005 19:10:39 GMT -5

Post by BP on Jun 2, 2005 2:01:43 GMT -5

Post by lyricale on Jun 4, 2005 10:04:59 GMT -5

Post by nellygurl on Jun 6, 2005 12:11:46 GMT -5

Post by lyricale on Jun 6, 2005 15:38:39 GMT -5

Post by nellygurl on Jun 6, 2005 18:24:12 GMT -5

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